Great pic! Could you please give more info on where you got these shrimp or where they came from?
I am also trying to breed a
Palaemonetes species (
P. pugio) and would very much like to see pics of your newly hatched shrimp - if/when possible. I agree that two hurdles that need to be overcome are 1) isolating the female to protect the newly hatched shrimp from being eaten by your fish and 2) preventing the female itself from eating its own offspring - requiring some ingenuity.
In my humble opinion, I think the reflections are from the egg surfaces and not from retinas. My guess is that you have some time (maybe up to 2 weeks since photo) before the "post"-larvae are fully developed (and finalize retinal development). Eggs start cloudy and then clear as development of the larva proceeds. The eggs in pic still look cloudy to me. But predicting hatches is a crapshoot...I've been off by 3 days using retinal development as a marker.
I agree if the eggs are not fertilized they will not be retained by the female. It's my understanding that only fertilized eggs stimulate the female to produce complete "embryonic coats" - which functions as the glue that holds them onto the pleopods - and has antimicrobial and gas-exchange benefits:
http://www.biolbull.org/cgi/reprint/192/2/231 . But then again I dunno if this is true for
Palaemonetes species without an extended larval stage...such as yours may be (
P. paludosus?).